This is my home. And I'll speak about 3 things I know to be true.
First, I have a dog who is in the hospital.
Second, I have a sister who is very annoying.
Third, I like the violin and I play it.
My dog's name is Dahm and in Korean, It means ease of combing, and she is a Maltese. Let me tell you about how I got to live with her. For 7 years I begged my mother for getting a puppy, but my mom wouldn't let me and my sister. I tried some deals, or even shouted to her, but still, she wouldn't let me. So 7 years past, I finally got my chance. She said if I get all 100 scores on all four test, I will let you have a puppy. And I did!!!!! I decided to call her Dahm and I crossed my heart and I hope to die that I will keep her safe. But, life is not always happy. She has a habit of standing only with her back legs so her bones got twisted so she is in the hospital. She looks like this:
After surgery, she is like this:![IMG_2927[1].JPG](https://mail.google.com/mail/?ui=2&ik=ce5349c88f&view=att&th=138cb9c86ecbb90d&attid=0.3&disp=thd&zw)
I hope she is all right.
The second thing I know is that my sister is annoying. If you think, 'How can a sister be that annoying?' You are either a girl or don't have a sister. I am his twin brother, and I was 2 minute first, but she never calls me a brother. And also, she is in puberty so she is always annoyed. Can you imagine living with a twin sister who doesn't even call you a brother? Annoying huh?
The last thing is, violins are thought to be 'boring' to some but not all violins are like that. I started violin when I was a first grader and I found out that there are lots of genres that we can play with a violin, and there is also an electric violin, too. My favorite classic is introduction and rondo capriccioso. This is the link: http://blog.naver.com/partlycloudy?Redirect=Log&logNo=110110998855&jumpingVid=3A80E9EAE15119F4843CDA0B300A64198F86
The last thing is, violins are thought to be 'boring' to some but not all violins are like that. I started violin when I was a first grader and I found out that there are lots of genres that we can play with a violin, and there is also an electric violin, too. My favorite classic is introduction and rondo capriccioso. This is the link: http://blog.naver.com/partlycloudy?Redirect=Log&logNo=110110998855&jumpingVid=3A80E9EAE15119F4843CDA0B300A64198F86
What do you think about it?
So that was something about me. Thank you for reading 3 things. I know to be true. Please write comments if you have any questions about me or if you want to share your thoughts with me. Also I have many to see pictures of Dahm so if you want to see more pictures, I'll show you so leave me comments!
So that was something about me. Thank you for reading 3 things. I know to be true. Please write comments if you have any questions about me or if you want to share your thoughts with me. Also I have many to see pictures of Dahm so if you want to see more pictures, I'll show you so leave me comments!
Thank you for sharing. For the intro please write it as a paragraph (don't put each sentence on a separate line).
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you used pictures but I think it is better to copy them so we can see them directly on the blog.
Finally, the paragraphs are too short. Try adding more details like who, what, when etc. I hope you will use my comments to help with your writing.
Hi, I'm your writing TA Chanjung. I enjoyed reading your post, especially the part where you dealt with your dog. I hope she gets well. I have some things to point out.
ReplyDeleteFirst, I suggest you use spelling checks to correct some seemingly apparent spelling errors.
Second, I want you to add some more descriptions so that the reader can correctly imagine what kind of dog you raise and what's your sister like. Without enough explanations, your writing would remain vague and inanimate.
So, please try to put some more efforts into it!
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ReplyDeleteWhere is your pictures?
DeleteI can't see it
ReplyDeleteI don't know why!!!!
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